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Some people believe that the best way to produce a happier society is to ensure that there are only small differences between the richest and the poorest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?





Nowadays, majority of citizens are concerned about happiness in their lives（as economy is advancing by leaps and bounds, people in increasing number start considering how to build a happier society）. It is believed that only to reduce the gap between the rich and the poor can create a happy society. Personally, I completely disapprove of this standpoint（to a larger extent） and this essay will analysis this view with relative examples.





On one hand, diminishing the disparity between different social levels plays an essential role in improving the happiness of majority of dwellers. This is because this could help the poor to enjoy equal rights with the rich（这个做不到，help people from disadvantaged group guarantee fundamental requirements））. For instance, students from poor background would have the same opportunity with the rich counterpart of entering the university without worrying the fund issue. However, this method is not the only and the best one to create a better and happier life radically, as it just satisfies people’s requirement from perspective of materials but not for individual health and spirit quality. Consequently, acquiring more money is not the best way to make people happy.

It has to be admitted that widening gap between the rich and the poor is the chief culprit in rising crime rate. If the government balances the income of people from all walks of life rationally by taxation with the aim to/for the sake of perfect social security system, the sense of well-being of the citizens will be enhanced immensely.









On the other hand,（however， we cannot lose sight of the fact that） there are alternative methods to rise one’s satisfaction and sense of happiness. Initially, the government should improve infrastructure and public service in the neighborhood. For example, some broken fitness facilities in the communities should be updated, and citizens should be also provided health check-up for free, updating their physical condition level and increasing their safety for personal health.

For one thing, each and every citizen embraces equal right to gain access to various social resources such as education and health care regardless of his/her wealth, status and prestige. Undoubtedly, individuals cannot decide their family backgrounds, but the government is able to ensure their later justice.（这个点你可以看看，我觉得它才是最重要的标准）





Additionally, people’s spirit level should be emphasized in the way of offering them better bonus for education and employment. Specifically, in terms of students, the authority should reduce the educational fee to decrease the financial pressure for poor families. Regarding some employees, they should be encouraged longer holidays and less workload which would rise their enthusiastic（stimulate their enthusiasm） towards work. As a result, this is an effective method to increase the efficiency of study and work for both students and workers.





In conclusion, I totally disagree with the view of narrowing the gap between the poor and the rich. Instead, I believe that improving spiritual and healthy level is more indispensable for people to gain happiness rather than just satisfying material requirement.

结尾不要否定题目的观点，我们只是不赞成它是最好的，但是他肯定也是一个不错的选择的。n a nutshell, I am convinced that the establishment of a perfect society depends on the combination of the factors mentioned above besides reducing wealth gap

存在的问题：1：语言还需要再简练些，字数最好控制在208-300之间，不要写多了，会暴露更多的问题

2：两个理由的角度有点类似，其实很多点可以写，比如环境也可以写啊。

3：一些小错误要避免，这类文章的结构是对的，但是引出的句子不对，导致文章结构不清晰。

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